Whether or not one can achieve his or her aims is mostly a question of luck

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Question:
Whether or not one can achieve his or her aims is mostly a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
Whether or not success in life depends on luck or other factors has been brought into focus for some time...

There are several reasons why some people believe that fortune is an essential factor in success. Firstly, good fortune brings a more significant opportunity to achieve a milestone...

However, I believe that hard work and determination are the determining factors for success. First, as an old saying goes, 'practice makes perfect.' Take a famous scientist, Thomas Edison, for example...

In conclusion, since possessing good fortune is never easy, I believe hard work and determination are the common elements of victory...
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Word Statistics
GroupWord NumberDistinctPercent
All Words24714859%
Top 300 Words112 (45%)48 (32%)42%
300 - 1000 Words46 (18%)36 (24%)78%
Over 1000 Words89 (36%)64 (43%)71%
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Link Words: 21 (including link phrase: 4)
Sentences: Number: 13; Average Length: 121 characters; Words/Sentence: 19
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is less than 250, doesn't match the basic criteria.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-The logic and reasoning look good, but some sentences seem wordy and not in the style that academic writing should be in.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are generally arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-Lexis is mainly appropriate for the task, though there are some errors in word choice.
Answer 2
Most people believe that destiny is more significant to achieve their goals; however, successful people ponder that hard work and dedication toward their goals are crucial to success...

Undoubtedly, people cannot attain success without diligence in their lives. If a student depends upon destiny for the final exam without hard work and passion for study, he will fail the exam...

Secondly, life is a war; it would be challenging to win without fighting with obstacles. So, it is the duty of people who do not have faith in destiny to achieve success in life...

To conclude, there is no doubt many people argue that luck is crucial to obtaining their goal, but luck cannot do anything without hard work...
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