Mobile phones have made life easier: anyone can use a mobile phone to answer or make calls at any place seven days a week

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 IELTS Academic Essay Answers - #6019
Question:
Mobile phones have made life easier: anyone can use a mobile phone to answer or make calls at any place seven days a week. Do you think this development has more positive effects or negative effects on individuals and society?
Answer 1
The widespread availability of mobile phones has dramatically transformed modern communication and daily life...

One of the most significant advantages of mobile phones is the improvement in communication and accessibility...

Another important benefit of mobile phones is their contribution to productivity and personal safety...

In conclusion, mobile phones have profoundly improved communication, productivity, and access to information in contemporary society...
Band: 8
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Word Statistics
GroupWord NumberDistinctPercent
All Words36620154%
Top 300 Words121 (33%)43 (21%)35%
300 - 1000 Words58 (15%)39 (19%)67%
Over 1000 Words187 (51%)119 (59%)63%
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Link Words: 33 (including link phrase: 0)
Sentences: Number: 19; Average Length: 147 characters; Words/Sentence: 19
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is too long, try to shrink it.
-The introduction seems long, refine sentences.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(19), mobile(12), can(8), that(7), phones(6), individuals(5), has(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.
Answer 2
The proliferation of the internet changed the face of communication media. The use of mobile phones in day-to-day life in society has produced an easier way of life...

It is true that the utilization of cellular phones has tremendously increased in society and made their life and work more effortless...

Amid all those benefits, the mobile phone also brings adverse effects; one of these is that mobile phones can take away your social life...

In conclusion, I am convinced that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. However, using this latest technology effectively is in individuals' and society's hands...
Band: 6
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