Some people think sports games are important for society, while others believe they should be taken as leisure activities

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Some people think sports games are important for society, while others believe they should be taken as leisure activities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Answer 1
Some individuals argue that sports games play a significant role in the development of the community, while others think that sports games should be played as leisure activities...

On the one hand, some individuals claim that sports games should be performed during spare time. Most people work from day to night and spend most of their time commuting and working...

On the other hand, it is undeniable that sports bring a plethora of benefits. Firstly, sports games may increase a country's income...

In conclusion, although some people think sports are nothing more than leisure time activities, I suppose that sports play a vital role in any society regarding finance and health status...
Band: 6
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Word Statistics
GroupWord NumberDistinctPercent
All Words23612452%
Top 300 Words115 (48%)43 (34%)37%
300 - 1000 Words33 (13%)24 (19%)72%
Over 1000 Words88 (37%)57 (45%)64%
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Link Words: 14 (including link phrase: 1)
Sentences: Number: 15; Average Length: 97 characters; Words/Sentence: 15
Suggestions:
IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is less than 250, doesn't match the basic criteria.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has sports(13), that(6), and(6), games(5), some(3), individuals(3), play(3); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-The organization is evident, and cohesive devices are used, though mechanically.
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Answer 2
Sports are an integral part of life, a hobby to some and a career to others. Humans feel immense gratification while partaking in activities that destress them, playing sports games being one of them...

Science has proven that playing sports releases dopamine, suppressing stress. For that reason, many people take time out of mundane daily work to indulge in sports...

Those who do make a career out of physical activities help the economy of the country they represent...

In conclusion, playing sports is much more than just a leisure activity. It's also a career for some and a large market for revenue...
Band: 5.5
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