Many animals are endangered. Some people argue that we should only protect animals that are useful to humans. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Many animals are endangered. Some people argue that we should only protect animals that are useful to humans. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many animals are endangered. Some people argue that we should only protect animals that are useful to humans. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Answer 1
Various animals have gone extinct in the last few decades, and still, these numbers are rapidly increasing...
Firstly, all animals are an essential part of the ecosystem. They are significant in maintaining natural balance and contribute to human life's survival...
Furthermore, these animals are valuable assets for the country as they provide a unique identity to the demographic area...
In conclusion, the existence of numerous animals is at higher risk. However, we should protect all the animals on the verge of extinction and endangered due to demographical changes, even though not all benefit humankind...
Firstly, all animals are an essential part of the ecosystem. They are significant in maintaining natural balance and contribute to human life's survival...
Furthermore, these animals are valuable assets for the country as they provide a unique identity to the demographic area...
In conclusion, the existence of numerous animals is at higher risk. However, we should protect all the animals on the verge of extinction and endangered due to demographical changes, even though not all benefit humankind...
Band: 7
Word Statistics
| Group | Word Number | Distinct | Percent |
|---|---|---|---|
| All Words | 276 | 148 | 53% |
| Top 300 Words | 137 (49%) | 49 (33%) | 35% |
| 300 - 1000 Words | 47 (17%) | 35 (23%) | 74% |
| Over 1000 Words | 92 (33%) | 64 (43%) | 69% |
Other Comments (endangeredanimals)
Link Words: 26 (including link phrase: 4)
Sentences: Number: 17; Average Length: 100 characters; Words/Sentence: 16
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IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has animals(10), are(8), and(7), them(7), they(5), these(4), that(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has animals(10), are(8), and(7), them(7), they(5), these(4), that(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-The main ideas are extended and supported; the response is ok, but some are insufficiently developed.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Each paragraph has a precise central topic, which is developed, and cohesive devices are effectively used.
Lexical Resources:
-There is a good range of vocabulary, and there are some less common words and phrases
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms.
Answer 2
Some individuals believe that the government should protect only essential animals. I can't entirely agree with this opinion and think that all animals play an important role in the environment...
On the one hand, if the government would only protect valuable animals such as cows, horses, pigs, chickens, and sheep, we would not have a problem with food and clothes in the future...
On the other hand, I believe all types of animals are essential for humans. Accordingly, even endangered ones are worthy of protection...
In conclusion, from my point of view, protecting not only valuable animals but endangered ones is important...
On the one hand, if the government would only protect valuable animals such as cows, horses, pigs, chickens, and sheep, we would not have a problem with food and clothes in the future...
On the other hand, I believe all types of animals are essential for humans. Accordingly, even endangered ones are worthy of protection...
In conclusion, from my point of view, protecting not only valuable animals but endangered ones is important...
Band: 5
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