It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct, e.g., Dinosaurs. There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

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Question:
It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct, e.g., Dinosaurs. There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?
Answer Hints:
It's a difficult question. Many species were extinct before humans came. Why do people need to prevent this from happening? Yes, we do need to. It's the only correct side. The point is that human activities are speeding up the species' extinctions.

Disagree
  • Human activities are speeding up the species' extinctions; we have a responsibility to treat other species fairly.
  • The loss of biodiversity will impact human life, from food and health to science and technology.
  • Ecosystems' quick change damages the earth's environment and threatens the survival of all species, including humans.
Agree
  • Extinction is a natural part of life on Earth.
  • Human effort cannot finally overcome nature's rules.
Answer 1
The question of whether humans should intervene to prevent animal species from becoming extinct has sparked much debate...

Firstly, while extinction is a natural process that has occurred throughout Earth's history, the current rate of species loss is unprecedented...

Secondly, biodiversity plays a crucial role in maintaining the health and stability of ecosystems...

Furthermore, humans have a moral responsibility to prevent the extinction of species that we have caused...

In conclusion, while extinction is a natural phenomenon, the current rate of species loss is mainly due to human activities...
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Link Words: 40 (including link phrase: 8)
Sentences: Number: 19; Average Length: 133 characters; Words/Sentence: 20
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IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is too long, try to shrink it.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has species(14), and(13), have(7), human(6), extinction(6), that(6), natural(6); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-Suggest refining coherence and cohesion by removing wordy linking words.