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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Answer 1
Without a doubt, people's views on how they treat and respect one another have changed over the past 30 years or so, as fewer people care if someone is kind or not or if someone is honest or not...
No one knows why social values such as trust, honor, or even chivalry no longer attract attention...
On the other hand, it is still possible to find societies replete with respect, honor, and kindness...
In conclusion, most modern societies have witnessed significant changes to their people's behavior for the past decades, as viewpoints on what is worth praising and complimenting are primarily associated and related to what people see in others as possessions such as money...
No one knows why social values such as trust, honor, or even chivalry no longer attract attention...
On the other hand, it is still possible to find societies replete with respect, honor, and kindness...
In conclusion, most modern societies have witnessed significant changes to their people's behavior for the past decades, as viewpoints on what is worth praising and complimenting are primarily associated and related to what people see in others as possessions such as money...
Band: 8
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| All Words | 358 | 191 | 53% |
| Top 300 Words | 171 (47%) | 63 (32%) | 36% |
| 300 - 1000 Words | 83 (23%) | 51 (26%) | 61% |
| Over 1000 Words | 104 (29%) | 77 (40%) | 74% |
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Link Words: 30 (including link phrase: 5)
Sentences: Number: 15; Average Length: 141 characters; Words/Sentence: 23
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IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is too long, try to shrink it.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has people(8), and(8), values(6), what(5), societies(5), their(5), they(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response:IELTS Essay Format:
-The essay is too long, try to shrink it.
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has people(8), and(8), values(6), what(5), societies(5), their(5), they(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
-All parts of the prompt are addressed, and a clear position is presented throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion:
-Ideas are presented, extended, and supported, arranged coherently, and there is a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resources:
-The range of vocabulary is sufficient to allow some flexibility and precision, and it shows an awareness of styles and collocation.
Grammar Range and Accuracy:
-There is a variety of complex structures with frequent error-free sentences and good control over grammar and punctuation.
Answer 2
Nowadays, people are judged by social status and wealth, while traditional values such as honesty are ignored...
It is believed that we live in the pop culture and materialistic era these days, as the public judges each individual based on their social status and wealth...
Although traditional values such as respect for others, responsibility, honesty, and integrity seem forgotten nowadays, they still play an essential part in many communities...
In conclusion, even though people are judged based on their wealth and social status nowadays, I believe old-fashioned values such as honor, respect, and trust cannot be eliminated from our daily lives...
It is believed that we live in the pop culture and materialistic era these days, as the public judges each individual based on their social status and wealth...
Although traditional values such as respect for others, responsibility, honesty, and integrity seem forgotten nowadays, they still play an essential part in many communities...
In conclusion, even though people are judged based on their wealth and social status nowadays, I believe old-fashioned values such as honor, respect, and trust cannot be eliminated from our daily lives...
Band: 7.5
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Answer 3
Today's world entails a different definition of a person's worth. To modern lifestyles, social status and material possessions have become immensely important...
We belong to the era of humankind, which is reaching for the stars, and one would go to any lengths to achieve one's dream...
Kindness and trust have no value in this rat race of materialism. In old times, your reputation was defined by your social skills...
To conclude, showing a man's worth through material possessions is unsustainable. Financial wealth and materials are extinguishable...
We belong to the era of humankind, which is reaching for the stars, and one would go to any lengths to achieve one's dream...
Kindness and trust have no value in this rat race of materialism. In old times, your reputation was defined by your social skills...
To conclude, showing a man's worth through material possessions is unsustainable. Financial wealth and materials are extinguishable...
Band: 7
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Answer 4
What is successful. Does it mean to be rich. This is a difficult question. We can't measure success based only on richness but without other aspects...
First of all, there are many successful artists, performers, and other professionals who are gaining a lot of money for what they do...
Also, Some people will get a significant amount of money without effort. Can you say they are successful...
Finally, most scientists work for the sake of knowledge without any financial return. For example, Darwin spent all his money on his trips, leading to his evolution theory...
In conclusion, Success can't be defined by the figures in your bank account. It's much bigger than this, and since money is not everything in life, you can't relate success to it...
First of all, there are many successful artists, performers, and other professionals who are gaining a lot of money for what they do...
Also, Some people will get a significant amount of money without effort. Can you say they are successful...
Finally, most scientists work for the sake of knowledge without any financial return. For example, Darwin spent all his money on his trips, leading to his evolution theory...
In conclusion, Success can't be defined by the figures in your bank account. It's much bigger than this, and since money is not everything in life, you can't relate success to it...
Band: 6
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Answer 5
I think that the question of whether money is the leading indicator of people's success is a controversial one...
First, if a person earns a lot of money, they have unique knowledge and experience, and people want to pay for this...
A second example is that the salary of a surgeon depends on his experience and knowledge and on how many surgeries he has completed successfully...
Finally, money plays, maybe, unfortunately, an essential role in our modern life. So, people who earn a lot of money by working hard are considered successful...
First, if a person earns a lot of money, they have unique knowledge and experience, and people want to pay for this...
A second example is that the salary of a surgeon depends on his experience and knowledge and on how many surgeries he has completed successfully...
Finally, money plays, maybe, unfortunately, an essential role in our modern life. So, people who earn a lot of money by working hard are considered successful...
Band: 6
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Answer 6
Given the power and influence of the super-rich, it might seem as if social status and material possessions are the new symbols of personal worth, but I do not think this is true in everyday life...
It is apparent that most celebrities today are admired or envied solely for their material wealth or position in various social hierarchies...
Nevertheless, I do believe that in their day-to-day lives, most people still believe in values such as honor, kindness, and trust...
In conclusion, I believe there is some truth to the notion that status and possessions have superseded old-fashioned values as a measure of a person’s worth...
It is apparent that most celebrities today are admired or envied solely for their material wealth or position in various social hierarchies...
Nevertheless, I do believe that in their day-to-day lives, most people still believe in values such as honor, kindness, and trust...
In conclusion, I believe there is some truth to the notion that status and possessions have superseded old-fashioned values as a measure of a person’s worth...
Band: 5.5
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Answer 7
Others often argue that those individuals who have much more money in their hands are successful. I can't entirely agree with this opinion and think that having a lot of money with you doesn't mean that you are successful...
First of all, I believe that there are many ways to be considered one person or individual who is successful in their life...
Secondly, having a cheerful family nowadays is much more important rather than having so much money; and having a family knowing that it is happy and doing great all the time may consider that you are successful...
In conclusion, I believe that having a stable job and a cheerful family gives you contentment and fruitful in life that success may be defined...
First of all, I believe that there are many ways to be considered one person or individual who is successful in their life...
Secondly, having a cheerful family nowadays is much more important rather than having so much money; and having a family knowing that it is happy and doing great all the time may consider that you are successful...
In conclusion, I believe that having a stable job and a cheerful family gives you contentment and fruitful in life that success may be defined...
Band: 5.5
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