Inventors are not as important to society as doctors

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Question:
Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Answer 1
Inventors are creative people who develop new ideas and products, whereas doctors are specialists who make us feel better when we are ill...

Inventors have had an enormous impact on our lives. In the past, they developed things like electricity, television, and airplanes...

Doctors, on the other hand, save lives. They train for many years and develop knowledge and skills that ordinary people do not have...

Although we cannot live without doctors, it is also true that we cannot live without inventors. They also depend on each other...

To conclude, I think doctors and inventors are equally important. Like many people in society, they play an essential part in human progress...
Band: 6.5
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Word Statistics
GroupWord NumberDistinctPercent
All Words25313352%
Top 300 Words138 (54%)59 (44%)42%
300 - 1000 Words64 (25%)38 (28%)59%
Over 1000 Words51 (20%)36 (27%)70%
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Link Words: 21 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 18; Average Length: 82 characters; Words/Sentence: 14
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IELTS Essay Format:
-You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has and(10), doctors(8), inventors(7), are(6), people(6), that(5), who(4); try to decrease duplicated words.
-High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some.
-Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.