Foreign language education should begin in kindergarten

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Question:
Foreign language education should begin in kindergarten. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Answer 1
According to a famous saying, 'The limits of my language are the limits of my world.' Indeed, the ability to speak several languages is considered one of the hallmarks of a cultured person...

Intellectually, learning a foreign language at a young age enables children to develop their brains...

Socially, learning a foreign language enables the young child to enter a more comprehensive cultural world...

Professionally, the child expands their career horizons by learning a foreign language in kindergarten...

In summary, numerous benefits flow from teaching a foreign language from kindergarten. The child will most likely grow up to thank those who made such a learning experience possible...
Band: 7.5
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Answer 2
We live in a globalized age in which foreign languages become more critical than before. Some people believe children should start learning a foreign language in kindergarten...

First, one must start sooner if someone wants to see an outcome soon. To be more precise, the brain's ability to learn new language reduces with growing up...

Secondly, learning a new language can broaden children's horizons by enhancing their social skills...

When children start their early education, their minds remain fresh, and they can catch more information...

Therefore, children have their own advantages in learning foreign languages in the early stages. Kindergarten and preschool are excellent starting points for them...
Band: 6.5
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Link Words: 13 (including link phrase: 2)
Sentences: Number: 15; Average Length: 100 characters; Words/Sentence: 16
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