Question: Nowadays, a few people take their family with them abroad whenever they go on a business trip. What are the advantages and disadvantages of them and their family?
Nowadays, people have to travel abroad more often to work than ever. Some people take their family with them on the business tour, which has both pros and cons...
On the one hand, those who take their families with them on foreign business trips think that their families will be able to visit new places with them where they otherwise would not go...
On the other hand, sometimes work needs undivided attention, and going on a business trip with family may affect the work...
In conclusion, although bringing family on a trip allows people to spend more time with loved ones, it can affect their performance at work...
Sentences: Number: 14; Average Length: 106 characters; Words/Sentence: 19
Suggestions: IELTS Essay Format: -You should avoid using common words repeatedly, and show your grammatical range and accuracy as possible. The essay has their(9), work(8), family(8), people(7), with(7), them(5), and(5); try to decrease duplicated words. -High-ratio basic sight words may degrade your writing; suggest rephrasing some. -Suggest using a few rare or uncommon words to demonstrate your vocabulary range and level.
Task Response: -It's difficult to answer with yes or no, but your answer is okay. Talking about 'casual leave' isn't a good idea. Try to get other points.